undone

where once i stood with self-respect
i lay to rest my pride
in vain a search my intellect
where past and passing stride
for reasons still to stand erect
in no one to confide
that all i had was self-respect
and what i had has died

I once was alive but know derelect
Now in darkness my dreams reside
Mourning now as I solemly reflect
There is no date to when I had died
A failed life I could only reject
Ascending from the pit, many times I have tried
Now there is no fire that will take effect
Now I fade, a forgotten shadow denied.

awesome !

Very nice poems. Have a real sense of loss, nostalgia and general pessimism

Thanks DT that's what it's all about

Wow did you make that up off the top of your heads guys? Unreal.

I made mine to 'match' Windup's it was inspirational
I really like Dumb teens comment -
"a real sense of loss, nostalgia and general pessimism "
Man that sums it all up

Hey I R Me or Windup can you write another poem as you guys are great at it this time something more intense and secret?

here is a link to my song writing carrer right here on UGN
http://www.captaincynic.com/thread.php3/thrdid=19195-u-frmid=15
enjoy.... or laugh or whatever.

i actually wrote that one a long time ago during my days as a depressed adolescent.
i don't have as much fuel for the fire as i used to, but winter usually leaves me in a mild state of nostolgia. here are three i wrote last month:

ink therapy

these words words are composed of
carefully sewn together
pieces of imagination and despair
ive lost my mind
but i can carefully piece it back together
not as good as new
but still not quite beyond repair

winter

just my luck
its winter's ashes
just my luck
im out again
kill me quick
im out of matches
such a bitch
too late for rain

dash

when all is passed
and past is dust
and all thats left
are thoughts of us
but brief and fading
like a sigh
thats heard upon the breath of time
then was it real
or just a dream
and did it even mean a thing

thanks, daisygirl--even though i dont like to admit it, i am at heart an attention-craving narcissist whose parents didn't give him enough support as a child, so admiration is something that really makes my day sometimes.