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Just some fantasy

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 31yrs • M •
A CTL of 1 means that MugenNoKarayami is a contributing member of Captain Cynic.
Just some fantasy
It appears life is not what it seems
your beauty's the kind I only see in my dreams
Wishing these words could explain what I mean
Fallin Short even with the aid of my stream

Lookin all around me
I swear I cannot believe
This is really happening
You convincing me to see
That this ain't just some fantasy

Our love is producing its own gravity
This feeling is inducing, Can't you see?
Watch me stop your breathes with a burst of intensity
open up that treasure chest, now you feelin every part of me

You are gorgeous I agree
Room is raisin in degrees
Baby this is happening
you convincing me to see
That this ain't just some fantasy

Now I see you sleepin comfortably
Please baby just give your word to me
Be mine for eternity
Accompany me through this forestry
Trust me boo I'm all you need
But I need an answer before we procede

It appears life is not what it seems
your beauty's the kind I only se in my drems
Wishing these words could explain what I mean
Fallin short even with the aid of my stream

You are gorgeous I agree
Room is raisin in degrees
Baby this is happening
You convincing me to see
That this ain't just some fantasy

You are gorgeous I agree
Room is raisin in degrees
Baby this is hapening
You convincing me to see
That this ain't just some fantasy
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I'm trying to go for an RnB/Love song theme
This is my first time trying to make an actual song so If there are any parts missing structurally, can you let me know before I record this????

Thanks

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"I'm a human being, God Dammit!! My life has value!!!"
 39yrs • M •
A CTL of 1 means that Chained Wings is a contributing member of Captain Cynic.
quote:
If there are any parts missing structurally, can you let me know before I record this????


Yeah. Taste!

R&B =




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"When I was a child I flew! Then as an adult- I watched others soar."
 39yrs • M •
A CTL of 1 means that Chained Wings is a contributing member of Captain Cynic.
Seriously though. Im just joking.

And I think that what youve written is actully good. Its better than most R&B. And what's even more impressive... is that you actually wrote it. Most pop music is written by other people and the "model" with the mediocre singing ability spends half an hour in a studio reading the lyrics then goes back to doing lines of coke and screwing around for the rest of the year.

You have a real talent with words Mugen, so its sort of like hearing the London Philharmonic Orchesta want to go from where they are, to doing Line Dancing music at the local YMCA.

(Its a step down.)

Becuse anyone can do R&B.

Ill just make some up as I write..

Girl you were made for me
cant you see
this was meant ta be

Tha way you make me feel
its so real

As I see you grind on the flo
yo booty lets me know
that you and I shuld go
and dance in prvate some mo

And Ill slap that ass reall gud
like you know I culd
coz you gonna be my number one boo
and Ill do anything fo you
Ill love you no matter what we go through
its just me an you

Come outside wid me
and youll see
we was meant ta be
you gon be my ho
cmon girl
lets get ready ta go.


Just call me Pimp Master Chained from now on.

But whatever I say, Its said in the same way a mate says to another mate when they dont see eye to eye on something. They will give thier freind a ribbing about it- but are happy if its what makes thier friend happy.

I really like your hiaku and poetry and just feel you have more talent than what I hear on the top 40 radio shows.

But if it makes YOU happy... then thats all that matters. Please dont let my opinions on certain music styles influence you if it is what you truly want to write.

And Im sure your girlfriend will hate me if you dont record it for her.

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"When I was a child I flew! Then as an adult- I watched others soar."
 31yrs • M •
A CTL of 1 means that MugenNoKarayami is a contributing member of Captain Cynic.
Pimp Master Chained, lmaoooooo. I respect every single word you say.

You seem to have a light hearted feeling while still issuing your own opinion.

I am personally not a big fan of RnB either. I thought I would try and put my own poetic spin on something that could be much more than it is.


I've just been into this genre recently cause I've pick out a few songs that have very catchy and rather soothing beats. The music itself is actually what inspired me to write this song, not the words accompanying it.


always thankful for the feedback

I'll try to write more stuff that's not so clichè hahha

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"I'm a human being, God Dammit!! My life has value!!!"
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