Wishful Thinking

there isnt a page for songs/ ryhme type of things so i thought poetry is the closest thing to it so here it is my short verse called:

'Wishful Thinking'

All these thoughts in my head ive been wishful thinking,
Cut the blade across and the pain is sinking
In, as I lye back and then I'm dreaming,
My vision now is black and my head is leaning
Back, relax just think of it as a fault I'm learning,
As I get wiser I stop, another page in turning
In my head, all those thoughts are suddenly dying,
And I'm thinking now why the hell I'm trying
To cut my life short, take it out my train of thoughts
Stop at the next station, get off that train, I've fought
My way through the lonelyness, and now as I finally leave,
I reach for the blade and once again I've started to bleed

The pain again, rushing to my brain again, whats left to regain?
I've became the same again and the pain remains...

toodles

i take its not that good then lol

thanks for the posts guys

i love it, it gives out an aura of feeling, as if i was you. I love the imagery and how you make the audiance feel as if they were in you shoes, trying to get your soul to scream out eh

THANKYOU FOR YOUR COMMENT...looks like your the only one who did like it! everyone else doesnt care but o well Thankyou

toodles

no problem, and honestly lass, its good literature, its very direct, unlike subliminal or wonderous self question reality poems, i love you your directness is applied

thankyou very muchos for the comment doody

Toodles

p.s i never knew they said lass in NYC it sounds so scottish lol

Toodles

I know, i like to be different. Sounds.. materialisticly and spritually bold.

niiice lol

yah, i been on another website lately eh, another forum....

what site?

http://blade376.com/forum/viewforum.php?f=13


I'm mynameisphilipmui

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