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Dream World

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8 Posts / 57M
     :   23yrs   :  
johnson8558

Dream World [+ favourites]

Is this just a dream?
Is none of it real?
Has all my loves been false, my hopes are lost
Is this just a dream?
Can’t you hear me scream?

My love for you, has been a failure
You never loved me, nor has anyone else
There’s a silence that surrounds me
Staining the heart with its silent feel
My life has never been real
I understand now, it was all a dream

Feelings, hope, lust and desire, it was all made up
For you, and your selfish antics
My eyes have been severed, but I can see beyond the cut
Everything was misunderstood
I believed every word, now I’m only a dream

From our very first touch
To our very last kiss
I never thought my love would shatter
I’d thought it’d last to my death
Now I’m dead before living, never knew what I was missing
Disappeared into the clouds, Dreamworld.


"It's hard to live, when I don't believe in life"

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2876 Posts / 57M
     :   24yrs   :  
Wyote

great stuff there...

"Has all my loves been false" change has to have or change loves to love... depending on what you want there


"UNIX is an operating system, OS/2 is half an operating system, Windows is a shell, and DOS is a boot partition virus. ~Peter H. Coffin"

8 Posts / 57M
     :   23yrs   :  
johnson8558

Thanks for the grammar correction


"It's hard to live, when I don't believe in life"

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2876 Posts / 57M
     :   24yrs   :  
Wyote

no prob, i particularly like that "my eyes have been severed..." line... it made me squint "staining the heart..." another good one. keep em comin'


"UNIX is an operating system, OS/2 is half an operating system, Windows is a shell, and DOS is a boot partition virus. ~Peter H. Coffin"

1104 Posts / 63M
     :   28yrs   :  
wesdawgy

quote:
Is this just a dream?
Can’t you hear me scream?



My fav. line, good job!


"I'd like to say something profound....."SOMETHING PROFOUND""

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