Repetative Tragedy

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Just something....

The hell of War
The hate
The destruction
Desolation
Misery
Fear
Pain
Torment
Rages inside
Inside myself
My life
Ruined
By all the hate
The hell
That we call Life
That we live each day
They like to say
It’s normal like this
It’s supposed to be like this
It’s alright
It’ll blow over
And then
It starts
All over again

Hmn what do you think?

~Fool

"Now I sit in my corner and patiently wait, with eyes as dull as mud, a hunger that none can heal, and I chew my lips for the blood."

hmn
Traum
A smiling girl by a badly twisted tree
Sitting daintily on the cat’s knee
To her right a creature unknown
Sits obediently under her control
At her feet a small white sheet
A picture on it of untold horrors
At the bottom a few hastily written words of terrors
Help me
It reads
And summons a few bad deeds
These ‘deeds’ as they’re called
Attack the foolish group that followed
Into the woods they were lost
And stumbled across
Their last loss
Of life that is
They were robbed
Of course that’s not all
A giant lake nearby
With an alligator inside
This alligator here
Also steals
Lives of course
Away from humans on ships
You must be quick
If you wish to escape without a rip
You know just a quick tip
And then the island in the middle of the lake!
It seems abandoned and gloomy
But oh
It’s not
A monster dwells here
Striking fear
Into those who come too near
It allows a few to live
But only on the isle
This would make those few who live
Helpless to its untold twisted wrath
With no escape
For them to turn to
But only to live in fear
Among the horrors
They stupidly followed

"Now I sit in my corner and patiently wait, with eyes as dull as mud, a hunger that none can heal, and I chew my lips for the blood."

No constructive criticism? Are they that bad...? I am sorry for posting them if they are....

"Now I sit in my corner and patiently wait, with eyes as dull as mud, a hunger that none can heal, and I chew my lips for the blood."

What is bad and what is good poetry, is totally dependant on perspective. Just because some people mightn't like your poetry, doesn't mean you should feel sorry for posting them. Opinion isn't fact.

As for me, the imagery and the meaning behind the second poem, I don't quite understand. Could you clarify the meaning perhaps? Also, the fact that you don't use any punctuation at all, makes it harder to read.

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Oh thank you. (:
Well the second one has no meaning really....it was just a dream of mine and I had to write it down for some reason. And I'm not sure exactly what all the imagery is....heh

"Now I sit in my corner and patiently wait, with eyes as dull as mud, a hunger that none can heal, and I chew my lips for the blood."