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Denial

Wasted
Corrupted
Lost in misery
None can touch her
None can save her.
Her soul is tainted with lies
With denial
Her dreams shattered
Her needs neglected
Her cries ignored
Nobody talks to her except her demons
They closed the door
They called her insane
And laughed at her denial
They said it was her
But she knew
It was them
The beasts with the evil smile
It was them who was wrong
They lost their minds
She could see it in their eyes
She could smell their hidden fear
The world is wrong
She longed to see the earth again
Longed to feel the touch of stolen rain
She was not a liar
It was them

can i have sum feedback

"I have nothing to be proud of today but hopefully tomorrow I will."

naked emotion. it's good, real.

"life sucks but its better than the alternative"

you seem to be her, the one on the poem

"In the sea of ilutions and frustations that life is, some swim and some drown"

It's really good. So much truth. Are you her?

"Crap. I lost my watch, now I'm lost in time."

no its not me
i write alot of poems about people but i don't know who
itz weird
thank u for ur comments it has really made my day

"I have nothing to be proud of today but hopefully tomorrow I will."

i think its great. there is a little bit of her in all of us ^_^

i would change this line tho -

"It was them who was wrong"
--> it was them who were wrong

actually, that line is hard to fix... just doesnt sound right in my head no matter what i do to it

"I am Akba-Atatdia"